Do you know a movie called, Spring, Summer, Fall, Winter and Spring'? In that movie, a young boy treated animals badly. He tied a rope to animals. So monk did the something to the young boy just as the young boy did, tying his body with a stone. Then the little boy could see animals that were already dead. So monk made the young boy to learn a lesson independently.
After seeing a part of the movie, I felt monk is a very wise man. Because without punishing a young boy with words, the monk made the boy to learn a lesson by himself, tying him to a rock on his chest.
Though this movie, I learned we must be responsible for what we do, if you do something bad, you must regret it for the rest of your life.
Hi Yujin. This is your Writing TA. It is a good summary of the film and a good reference to your own experience. I also like the conclusion as well. Everything is good but it would be helpful if you elaborated more in each paragraphs. Otherwise, good job! :)
ReplyDeleteI think it is a bit too short but I think this is a good essay.
ReplyDeleteThis is a good essay however it is too short. You should write 450-500 words. Try giving more detailed examples in the body of your essay and write a more detailed conclusion.
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